I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG. These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the security area directors. Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just like any other last call comments. The summary of the review is Ready with Nits. Security -------- Section 1 says that Security is out of scope for this draft. The Security Considerations section, in its entirety, is as follows: "Most RAW technologies integrate some authentication or encryption mechanisms that were defined outside the IETF." Perhaps that is adequate for this document; however, I would recommend that some material from the last paragraph of Section 1 be added to the above. Perhaps something like the following sentence: "The IETF specifications referenced herein each provide their own Security Considerations, and the lower layer technologies used provide their own security at Layer-2." Adding this would more than double the size of the Security Considerations. :-) Big Nits -------- Section 4: This section states that IEEE Std 802.11-2012 and IEEE Std 802.11-2016 "introduce" support for various features. This is wrong. These are merely 802.11 standard complete roll-ups, each derived from the previous roll-up by incorporating the 802.11 standard amendments adopted since that previous roll-up. Significant features were "introduced" by such amendments to 802.11. Section 4.3.1/4.3.2.2: References to 802.11be as being in the future, or being "expected" to include or introduce features, are out of date. I believe 802.11be received final approval as a standard in September 2024. See https://grouper.ieee.org/groups/802/11/Reports/802.11_Timelines.htm Smaller Nits ------------ Title: Should add "(RAW)" after "Reliable and Available Wireless". Abstract: The word "browses" in the first line sounds strange. I suggest replacing it with "surveys". Section 1: Same problem with "browses". Section 3: "which enables to use the" -> "which enables using the" "listener enables to always maintain them" -> "listener enables always maintaining them" Section 4: General: Lots of features are listed in Section 4 but there should be some statement that there are many, many, many more in the 802.11 standard. After all, we are talking about thousands of pages. (802.11-2020 is 4,377 pages long.) General: Sees like somewhere you might mention 802.11 frame fragmentation. On a very noisy link, you don't want to transmit for too long as the probability of an error would be very high and the unicast link level acknowledgement would force retransmission of a large frame. By fragmenting, each transmission is shorter and the link level retransmission applies to each fragment which is a smaller amount to retransmit. Then there is the whole TXOP (transmission opportunity) feature... Initial part of Section 4: I consider "Wi-Fi 6", "Wi-Fi 7", and "Wi-Fi 8" to be marketing designations. Actual technical features of IEEE Std 802.11 have specific technical feature names and almost always correspond to a particular amendment. But it may be impractical to change at this point. Section 4.1: The paragraph on the Wi-Fi Alliance reads like marketing. There should be some sort of reference for the WFA. If nothing else, the https://www.wi-fi.org/ URL. There should also be a reference for the Avnu Alliance. Perhaps https://avnu.org/ Section 4.2.1.4: Temporal references generally do not age well. I suggest that both occurrences of "new" be deleted from this section. Section 4.3.2.2: It is an interesting question whether 802.11be permits sending the same frame more or less simultaneously over multiple links in MLO operation. See my presentation https://mentor.ieee.org/802.11/dcn/24/11-24-1705-01-00bn-frer-for-802-11bn.pptx Section 5.1, last sentence: "integrated to other standards" -> "integrated with other standards" Section 5.2: "be combined to OFDM" -> "be combined with OFDM" Section 5.2.1: "enables to meet industrial" -> "enables meeting industrial" Section 5.2.1.2: "allows to deliver a packet" -> "allows delivering a packet" "in fact associated to a Track." -> "in fact associated with a Track." "the transmit bundle associated to the Track" -> "the transmit bundle associated with the Track" I did only a light review of Sections 5, 6, 7, 10, and 11. Thanks, Donald =============================== Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) 2386 Panoramic Circle, Apopka, FL 32703 USA d3e3e3@gmail.com